The shrouds of the city stood shackled
By the dew spackled avenue
In sheer honest awe of the new.
Who toddled 'cross cobbled rooms,
Held onto greased wheel wells,
In hopes to be propelled,
But were dragged under.
The spell was an old one,
That the new ones knew none of.
So now some would be be models,
And some would just rue:
The imagined demons
Of unrighteous actions
Enacted even before birth.
Whilst whirlwinds of doubting,
Higher pitched than the shouting
Of the shrouds who stood by
As it spiraled out into the blue
Though soon the firmament corrupted
By rising ashes of rent checks,
Of firecans and
Infant hopes ascending
In search of some heaven,
Which nstead made the threat of ghosts
Much more likely.
The key to the obscene
Not revealed so easy,
As to say that perspective
Might liberate the needful.
Indeed it could be helpful
To see night as a blessing
In which the dressings of a spiritual salad
May be lifted, inconspicuous,
Prepared in poor dress
Under free dressers,
Under freeways.
Is it easy to believe
That such masses of sleaze,
Have time to conceive of condiments?
Hardship,
A relative threat to self management.
Privilege,
Concerned with the threat,
Of foreign ghosts
Brewed so domestic,
Obscuring the disconnect.
I like this poem. "My City," it starts off abstractly but the focus and perspective become clear in the end. There is scathing social commentary here, dark & sad & at times hopeless. I liked the sixth stanza in particular, maybe for it's hint of hope, "In which the dressings of a spiritual salad
ReplyDeleteMay be lifted," but also for your use of humor, anaphora, and alliteration, "Prepared in poor dress
Under free dressers,
Under freeways."
Overall this is meaningful and beautiful work-however dark.
-Ms. Crowe